This story is unfinished at the time of this writing and so too perhaps must be my review. At nineteen chapters, however, I’m reasonably sure that there’s enough here to form and express an opinion and I can always change my mind later.
I just lied. This isn’t really a story, except in the same sense that listening to my husband and his friends talk about their last fishing expedition is a story. They like to talk about the “Sweet Spot” where the bass have red hair, big tits, and after midnight, will bite on the first juicy worm that comes along. He thinks I don’t know…Ha!
So what we have here is a scene, a very long masturbatory fantasy revolving around a submissive, 30-something man (Jon) who is quickly turned into cock hungry size queen by a co-worker’s boyfriend (Frank). With all parties concerned happy about the situation, including the statuesque co-working girlfriend in question, were missing a necessary element by which all stories are defined: Conflict.
Thankfully, this is porn and all the conflict we really need is whether or not our hero can really deep-throat that 10+ inches of strident male ego. This is stroke fantasy for readers looking for nothing but wall-to-wall gay male porn. Like me! I like gay porn as much as the next girl. Two guys are hot! They’re especially hot when they’re joined by a woman, in my honest opinion, simply because it gives me a character I can more easily identify with. This story does offer precisely that in chapter six, when a character named Claudia is introduced. That’s my favorite part.
Unfortunately, and this is where I have to complain, I kept waiting for the big scene with Lori, who is the girlfriend and co-worker, and by all accounts a beautiful and dominant woman. I rather expected she’d have all kinds of bad-sexy ideas about how to treat a subbie cock-slut like Jon. I mean, she’s introduced when Jon begins his narrative way back in chapter one, talking about how he jerks off fantasizing about her…What happened?
I’m very much hoping the author is just saving her for a rainy day and that Lori plays a much larger role in subsequent chapters, and not only for purely selfish reasons. I have to be honest and say that many of the sex scenes become repetitive. They’re all hot, they’re all well-written, but after 19 chapters it becomes difficult to find something fresh. New characters are introduced, including a studly black pizza guy and Jon’s landlord, an older man with blackmail on his mind, (Jon is such a willing slut, though…black mail?) but the new dogs are up to the same old tricks, it seems.
It is very hard to write a very long stroke scene such as this and hold the reader’s interest. I’m not suggesting the author invent some deep, convoluted plot, or take off on an angst driven journey of self-discovery, or even introduce transsexual aliens bent on turning all of humankind into Paris Hilton clones…This is pure porn and there’s nothing wrong with that. My suggestion is simply to mix it up a little more. Get some other characters in there, like Lori, and bring Claudia back, she was hot. Play with a new dynamic, change the context, and have some fun with it. These are elements that have been introduced, but not exploited. Go for it!
That’s my suggestion anyway and so it’s worth half a Somalian nickel probably.
Bottom line? There’s some smoking’ hot male-male sex here. A lot of it! This is just a big porn fix for readers looking for gay fantasy. If you want plot and depth of characters, look elsewhere, if you want all the sex your little head can handle, you’ve found a home with the Co-worker’s Man. I heartily recommend it, but be warned…You’ll probably be skimming through it after chapter five, looking for something new to sink your teeth into.